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    dots Submission Name: Blood Curdled at The Chilling Quilldots

    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 210
    Class/Type: Poetry/Vampire
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    dotsBlood Curdled at The Chilling Quilldots

    Blood Curdled at The Chilling Quill

    Sanctuary I prayed
    Feet stumbling at a wet dank alter
    Crumbled brick the skeletal shell
    Of ancient cathedral

    Mausoleum in the gloom of battered drips
    Their ghostly quill of written blood
    And zombie skins of parchment
    Write their movement
    On the clammy tips of sweat

    Don’t even breathe

    As the screaming prickling hairs stand stiff

    As the chilling curdled down my neck

    I am alone

    Cold swirls fog phantoms in my mouth
    And bitter teeth bite at one time warmth
    As every veil and smack of dark
    Stammers of cold footsteps

    Cold stone to grind my fist
    At Death





    Hunters Moon haunted its taste for blood
    The cowl of foxes
    In midnights canine witchcraft
    Thought to stampede on shattered stain glass
    And spit the gargoyles fallen head
    In spells of horror demolished

    Sainted tiny fire I prayed
    From the tombs of dusted bones
    Let me sleep

    Let me sleep
    Behind burning eyes
    And drag from the crag the whimpering prize
    Of terror

    Let me edge on the ripping dawn
    Never to rest on burial ground

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      Hi5 to vampires. I liked it in a chilling, foreboding way. You created a vivid imagery by using mere words, kudos for that. My favourite stanza is:

    "Let me sleep
    Behind burning eyes
    And drag from the crag the whimpering prize
    Of terror"

    That stanza actually made me shiver. I also particularly liked many of your metaphors, my favourite being:

    "As every veil and smack of dark
    Stammers of cold footsteps"

    Do you mind if I quote you on that someday?

    Keep up the good work :)
    | Posted on 2008-11-05 00:00:00 | by Iffy | [ Reply to This ]

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