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    dots Submission Name: Chancedots

    Author: Katherine_Music
    ASL Info:    21/F/NC
    Elite Ratio:    3.38 - 17/18/11
    Words: 104
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 543
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 642


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    I dream of your arms
    holding me tight
    as we dance so close
    like you never want
    to let me go.

    We sway to the beat
    as I'm swept off my feet
    every time you look me in the eyes
    but since it's you
    it's no surprise.

    My blue eyes search desperately
    for a sign of hope
    in those gorgeous brown eyes you have
    as I hope my chance
    was not lost twelve years ago.

    I grasp your hand
    and plead with my eyes
    just to get a chance
    to be your perfect girl
    like you're my perfect man.

    Submitted on 2008-11-05 03:27:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I dunno, it's kinda sugary for my taste. Also the format isn't great either those long lines don't help the text. Maybe you could revise it a bit and try to make the images clearer and the text flow better.
    | Posted on 2008-11-06 00:00:00 | by Paradox | [ Reply to This ]

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