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Lonely Pine


Author: Roula
ASL Info:    18/female
Elite Ratio:    2.72 - 46 /64 /45
Words: 50
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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Lonely Pine



A beautiful tower covered in moss,
solitary in serenity
scrutinizing the stillness of cedar-lake green
complemented by blossoms
of winter rose velvet -
icy to the touch -
until,
the Golden Sun's rays crawl through
to the moss landing and caress the calmness
unveiling Life.





Submitted on 2008-11-05 23:22:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Yeah the poem is ok. There are some errors though, in lines 5, 6 and 8 some symbols are showing, like the euro sign and a Romanian letter as well. You should edit it a bit.
| Posted on 2008-11-06 00:00:00 | by Paradox | [ Reply to This ]
  I love poems about nature and the outdoors, and this was lovely! Excellent word pictures here, and a delightful mood and feeling incorporated in the poem.
| Posted on 2008-11-05 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]


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