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    dots Submission Name: Lonely Pinedots
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    Author: Roula
    ASL Info:    18/female
    Elite Ratio:    2.72 - 46/64/45
    Words: 50
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsLonely Pinedots
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    A beautiful tower covered in moss,
    solitary in serenity
    scrutinizing the stillness of cedar-lake green
    complemented by blossoms
    of winter rose velvet -
    icy to the touch -
    until,
    the Golden Sun's rays crawl through
    to the moss landing and caress the calmness
    unveiling Life.





    Submitted on 2008-11-05 23:22:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Yeah the poem is ok. There are some errors though, in lines 5, 6 and 8 some symbols are showing, like the euro sign and a Romanian letter as well. You should edit it a bit.
    | Posted on 2008-11-06 00:00:00 | by Paradox | [ Reply to This ]
      I love poems about nature and the outdoors, and this was lovely! Excellent word pictures here, and a delightful mood and feeling incorporated in the poem.
    | Posted on 2008-11-05 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]


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