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    dots Submission Name: Fallingdots

    Author: dismal_s child
    ASL Info:    19/F/On A Carousel
    Elite Ratio:    3.24 - 451/419/172
    Words: 296
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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       Startex off as a poem ended as an inner monolauge.
    I can't stand how school is anymore.
    I can't take this.

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    I play stupid.
    skating doltishly around the issues.
    Skittering uneasily on my skates.
    I twisted my ankle quite a few times.
    but that only brings me back down
    Down to earth.

    how difficult to be tied down!
    to feel the steel clasped around my wrists
    Once again
    Once again.
    they always cut my ankles. those heavy steel shackles. Always leaving little bit of my blood.
    the tinest bit of my blood Decorating the shackles.

    I play stupid, Playing stupidly uncomfortably at the edge of the earth you'd think they'd put a gaurdrail at the edge of the earth. But they don't.

    So I fall.
    I am too clumsy.
    I fall into this rabithole.
    I fall but still nothing is there.
    I am not afraid of hitting the ground
    for where is it?
    It's just a vaccume
    just a vaccume.
    Floating aimlessly.
    Aimlessly floating.

    So clumsy.
    Stupid Me.

    Sometimes, I'm proud.
    But only sometimes.
    Sometimes I act intelligent.
    but only sometimes
    Sometimes I'm happy.
    ...But only sometimes.

    Whatever happened to me?
    Where did my intelligence go?
    Where did I go?
    into this vaccume.
    this vaccume!
    oh fuck this vaccume! I cant take it anymore!
    I want out.
    I want fucking out.
    I can't stand this.
    I don't know why.
    Why doesn't anybody care?
    Where did everyone go?
    Where did I go?
    I lost my footing.
    If I ever had it.
    I lost it.
    I've fucking lost it.

    I need to be pulled back.
    Back into the sanctuary.
    The stillness only He has imposed.
    The calm. The strength only He has given.
    I need it.
    I need that now.
    Not this.
    Never This.
    Stupid Me.
    I won't escape this vaccume.
    There's no use in hoping.
    All dreams get shattered.

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      I think all high school is like this, angry, hurting, holding you back, for all of us that don't quite fit in, that see things a little differently. I'm riticuled at school because I write poetry, because I love to dance like no one else is there, and because I refuse to be what they expect. Don't give up, it isn't the whole world, even though it seems like it at times.

    Lady Rose
    | Posted on 2009-03-24 00:00:00 | by Texan_Poet | [ Reply to This ]
      I sense some anger as well as sadness in this peice. I love the repitition when useing "but only sometimes" and flopping wording around like "Aimlessly floating". This peice is an inspiration for my next work I thank you for writing this piece.
    | Posted on 2009-01-07 00:00:00 | by Sepheroth432 | [ Reply to This ]
      I will catch you when you fall.
    Breathe air into your lungs.
    And always offer a solid rock for you to regain your barings.
    I care and I love you.
    | Posted on 2008-11-07 00:00:00 | by SAGITTREVEALED | [ Reply to This ]
      in zero gravity, there is no 'up' or 'down'

    c. by ruejacobs 1996

    to the untrained eye
    she is descending
    how far will she fall
    before she catches herself?

    observe her, then.
    how she extends her arms
    in silent supplication

    you care not to
    come to her rescue and so

    in zero gravity
    you continue
    upward to the untrained eye

    pay close attention now
    she is not descending
    not spiralling down out of control

    you have misunderstood.

    analise your own trajectory
    according to your calculations
    by now the air should be thinner
    more difficult to breathe

    but it's not it's not

    yes her arms reached towards you
    she tried to pull you in

    not as you assumed
    in the drowners grasp

    but because she ascends
    and wants to take you with her.


    i love you, my Angel.

    | Posted on 2008-11-06 00:00:00 | by ruejacobs | [ Reply to This ]

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