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    dots Submission Name: A Poets Endaemonism dots

    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 221
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    A Poets Endaemonism

    A word
    An infatuation
    Idle in the onlookers eye
    More space than is bearable
    In which thoughts edge their brink
    With an abyssal climate
    Of lost heart, warmth and heat
    A silence that has no one left to cry

    Footsteps placed that gathered not one thing
    Only countenanced dust in everything
    That litter and litany of life
    Opened no doors
    Gave no chances
    Offered no hope

    Wait for tomorrows breaking day

    The avenues are filled
    And yet emptiness walks there constantly
    Mirage of bright sun given finally
    No beauty recognised
    No thought or voice imparted
    So returned at last to sanctuary

    Waiting for yesterday

    A bright release by sleepwalking
    Soft and keening down the thronging streets
    A clueless moment for seeking mystery
    And stalking the nape of another’s neck
    Slipping through a leafy dapple
    Forming in the note of a church bell
    Floated the dream

    By the interlacing of fingers
    And the traces of another time
    Could anything be renewed
    In the heart beat of light and the pulse of love
    He thought so very much
    Of her
    elixir mirage
    Gliding in sunbeams through the crowd
    She stepped from the breeze
    And finally

    Met his eyes

    Waiting for today

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