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    dots Submission Name: Devoteddots
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    Author: dismal_s child
    ASL Info:    19/F/On A Carousel
    Elite Ratio:    3.24 - 451/419/172
    Words: 65
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 807
    Average Vote:    3.0000
    Bytes: 380



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    dotsDevoteddots
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    So like the devoted before me
    So like Ophelia the sweet
    I weave flowers and sing
    And sit at my Master's feet

    So like the devoted before me
    I give you violets for love
    I give you Posey for memory
    And I sing until my song is done
    And I sit here refusing to leave
    Because like all the rest I am your devotee




    Submitted on 2008-11-06 20:59:23     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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       How can you be devoted to one who throws himself at your feet and upon your mercy?
    I can't find the correct words to descibe this one. Maybe, in person, when I see your sweet smile again.
    Very Very beautiful, as are you.

    Luv...Yours
    | Posted on 2008-11-07 00:00:00 | by SAGITTREVEALED | [ Reply to This ]
      simple. i enjoyed this piece.

    </3 lisa
    | Posted on 2008-11-06 00:00:00 | by 777sacrites777 | [ Reply to This ]
      balance, Little One.

    make it reciprical.

    nice work, this one...

    but don't fall too far.


    love and kisses,
    hugz n misses,

    Mummie
    | Posted on 2008-11-06 00:00:00 | by ruejacobs | [ Reply to This ]


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