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    dots Submission Name: Darlingdots
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    Author: Priestess
    ASL Info:    21/female/usa
    Elite Ratio:    2.22 - 49/118/51
    Words: 115
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
    Total Views: 680
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    Description:
       A tribute to my beautiful friend.


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    dotsDarlingdots
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    Darling,
    Let me kiss the shadows under your eyes
    And whisk them away with my sweet lullabies.
    Though your tempting tongue seems much more sweet
    And makes my silent pen seem obsolete.

    Your voice is more delightful than an angels choir
    So here is my soul, please take it higher.
    Although your words I tend to fear
    Your whispers are always so sincere.

    When I touch your beautiful hand
    The softness there is hard to stand.
    And when I feel your tender embrace
    It's all I can do not to kiss your sweet face.




    Submitted on 2008-11-06 21:29:44     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wow, this was really beautiful, I liked it alot. It really shows how you feel, how you love, but you are afraid to show it. Very beautiful indeed. I liked how you italicized every other line as well. Made its structure look even better!
    Great write!
    -Aang
    | Posted on 2008-11-07 00:00:00 | by Aangskate | [ Reply to This ]


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