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    dots Submission Name: As I fill my lungs -:-dots

    Author: Cannablisjunkie
    ASL Info:    22/Male/Indianapolis, IN
    Elite Ratio:    2.59 - 77/147/87
    Words: 151
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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    dotsAs I fill my lungs -:-dots

    With your eyes so soft
    and your scent so sweet
    only matching your face in my head
    each time I blink

    I'm missing you now,
    and untill you figure out how
    we'll feel again.
    Together endeavouring one anothers self
    avoiding any way least vain to them.

    And it's okay to wait,
    as long as you're here to stay.
    And, i'll change the way
    lonliness prevails our far away
    distant sayings

    She says,
    'If I could I would be right there,
    close to you breathing in the same air!'

    Love, 'it's okay! 'cause one day,
    you're trust will lye in my hands.
    And, it's okay 'cause one day,
    they'll all be apart of 'our' plans..

    Untill then I can fan you in your dreams,
    with palm leaves off the beach.
    And, we'll never have to leave
    untill our bodies rested needn't anymore sleep..

    Submitted on 2008-11-07 04:22:56     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      those eyes are wonderful...
    Nice poem overall, beautiful i may say...
    | Posted on 2008-11-09 00:00:00 | by KeeperOfLight | [ Reply to This ]
      this is powerful and pertains well to how im feeling right now. this is how i picture love in a beautiful light. it is an excellent write. keep it up
    | Posted on 2008-11-08 00:00:00 | by Ali Marie | [ Reply to This ]

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