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    dots Submission Name: Where The Peaceful Dream Unfurleddots

    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 483
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       A re-write of something I wrote a very long time ago

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    dotsWhere The Peaceful Dream Unfurleddots

    Where The Peaceful Dream Unfurled

    Was it just imagining
    Which brought these eyes to see inside
    Another world
    We could have realised
    A different story
    For all our lives

    Looking into this stolen world
    Where the peaceful dream has unfurled
    Its banner of love beneath the sun
    A flag of truce for everyone

    The journey of our hearts becomes celebration
    When all is gathered into one
    A birth in unity
    Of this global family

    Looking into a broken crystal sphere
    Only turns on me its dark reminder
    Of what we all have become

    Peopled with lives of separation
    So filled with their neighbours fear
    Grabbing all they think they need
    Appeasing someone else’s greed
    Their solitude in slavery
    To the markets of their luxury

    While other faces shine with a tarnished love
    Are hoping for the pious judgement day to come
    So their elite self-righteous sense of justification
    Can gloat in contentment and damnation over the wicked ones
    And please themselves with all the evil they have never done
    But smiling still with condemnation as they watch
    Their brothers and sisters

    And on the tiny gang-land street
    Where colours run with gangster feet
    The agonies of our divided homelands
    Are played upon a smaller stage
    Violence by the guns divide
    Rules to keep the urban warriors small
    Keep them in their skin deep cultures
    Keep them fighting for the scrapes let fall
    From the tables of wealthy vultures

    Usurped by those who wanted more than would suffice
    They sold us back ourselves for a price
    They are smiling in our death
    Killing each other for the chance
    The less we are
    The more there is left
    To fight over

    Keep us fighting in every way
    For a better life some day
    In these lives we do not own
    With all its empty promise we are shown
    Robbed from us so long ago
    We were redesigned and then re-sold
    Is now the only way
    We have ever known

    Looking into this stolen world
    None of us seem to be human anymore
    Our future confiscated by the fear of fear
    Destroying all the things we hold so dear
    So love can not stretch beyond the wall
    To the faces of the starving poor
    And extend our helping hand
    To us all

    Was it just your imagining
    Which brought my eyes to see inside
    Another world
    We could have realised
    A different story
    For all our lives

    Looking into this stolen world
    Where the peaceful dream did unfurl
    All the banners of its love beneath the sun
    Became a flag of trust for everyone

    Did the journey of our hearts become
    When all were gathered into celebration
    A birth of this global family
    Into a unity of one

    Submitted on 2008-11-07 20:03:23     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This has some really good images, and messages, but at times those seem to get lost in unnecessary words and diction.

    I think it could be shortened down, especially some of the repetition, which doesn't really seem to add to the piece.

    Overall, I liked it! God job!
    | Posted on 2008-11-09 00:00:00 | by TheStillSilence | [ Reply to This ]

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