Fucking Angels by Mister Fizzle

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Author:	Mister Fizzle
ASL Info:	32/M/Hell in a Handbasket
Elite Ratio:	5.4 - 751/762/176
Words:	158

Class/Type:	Poetry/Misc
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fucking angels

Fucking Angels dots

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Took myself seriously for awhile.
Fucked angels and
dreamt of putting
sturdy bullets through my brain.
But their direct manner
made me secretly laugh (the bullets, mind, not the angels)
and I chose marriage instead.

Finest dawn on your birthday, marriage.
Gray storm clouds full of rain.
Tornadoes blowing everything
back to hell. Leaving one of those
wide gaping trenches
you only fully grasp
from a chopper.

Let me get this out.

I am dismal.
breaking train wreck tragedy
on the 7 o'clock news.

Nothing at all like fucking angels,
or the romantic
suicide-madness of youth.

I want to say something
and mean it to you
like nothing I have ever meant before.
Speak a word of truth
that reverberates through
computer screens and touches
every single soul.

I know my word. And it is of black places.

Separate.

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  this piece is extremely powerful. a sheer torrent i can literally feel. the observations you perceive: direct and scathing.

that's all i can say.
damn.
| Posted on 2008-12-24 00:00:00 | by meoww | [ Reply to This ]
  This really touched me. I gather from the comment below you are going through a divorce. Being 17, and not yet even close to marriage, I cannot share your pain. However, two years ago my parents got a divorce after 15 years of marriage. It has taken me those two years, plus more, to regain mental balance. My parents however, they are not so fortunate. Each still struggle daily with each other and the toils that come with a divorce.

I wish you well, and hope for a speedy recovery from such a destruction of emotions.

I find this poem messy. Normally I wouldn't like that, but in the context (even before I read you were going through a divorce) I liked it. This pain you feel is confused, messy, and if you were to write it in a clear and organized way it wouldn't really be telling a true story.

The flow, I think because of this "messy" pain, was brilliant. I read it straight through, wasn't bored, and felt the effects immediately after.

This stanza in particular held my attention:

"I want to say something
and mean it to you
like nothing I have ever meant before.
Speak a word of truth
that reverberates through
computer screens and touches
every single soul."

Your word of truth reverberated through my computer screen and touched my soul. Thank you.

-Miss M.
| Posted on 2008-11-08 00:00:00 | by fightingirl19 | [ Reply to This ]
  It must be the sarcophagal wrappings
leading me to believe this blast of pain
has no basis in a cotton cloudy kingdom
if I dance with this bullet, angels remain

dark choices
and dark voices
love me do
| Posted on 2008-11-08 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]
  What the [censored] hell is "ever" saying in that comment?

Anyhow, hope your divorce is going well.
| Posted on 2008-11-08 00:00:00 | by Aaron Felix | [ Reply to This ]
  damn. you know, I have never been able to squeeze a single word out when comfortable.
they always flow out of this place of loneliness or a certain madness. not insane madness but... well I suppose you either know what I mean or you don't. if I'm not reading way too much into this, I'm guessing you do. comfort has this way of slowing things down. making things easy to describe without much effort and that (for me) equals apathetic and concise poetry. hmmm... maybe something is wrong with me. seems it should be the other way around. I guess why write about it when you have it?
I might be missing the point here but damn.
thats all.
| Posted on 2008-11-08 00:00:00 | by ever | [ Reply to This ]

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