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One day


Author: danni_amazing
ASL Info:    17/F/Pa
Elite Ratio:    1.49 - 1 /3 /8
Words: 119
Class/Type: Deep Thought /Longing
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One day



Your side of the bed is cold and i get lonely
because you are not here to hold me.
I feel i can't go on without your touch, your love, your kiss.
I miss the way you smell.
The way you smile when your nervous.
Nights like this i wish you were mine.
Yet your stuck in her evil clutches..
Dying to get out.
One day I will rescue you.
I'll pry you out of her evil hands..
One day...
Then it'll be like before.
Like when you held my hand in the streets of falcons....
Just like before...
She won't stop us...
I promise i wont let her...
I'm coming to save you...
One day...





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