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    dots Submission Name: Caught In The Raindots
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    Author: SanctityExposed
    ASL Info:    25
    Elite Ratio:    3.98 - 48/66/40
    Words: 170
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nostalgia
    Total Views: 561
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 1180



    Description:
       My holiday poem


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    dotsCaught In The Raindots
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    Summer has come and gone
    Oh why has the sultry breezes
    Blown through my hair
    Only to leave a soft haunting caress?

    My bare feet long to feel the
    Warmth of the gritty sand
    Memories trail between
    Cold water and hot concrete

    In stead of the distant sunny rays
    Lies the brittle aroma of autumn
    Leaves the color of rusted metal
    Dance happily along the driveway

    Winter billows in the clouds above
    Casting gray shades of mellow temperament
    I hold out my hands, close my eyes
    And I dream

    Geometric shapes of melteable lace
    Fall upon my cheeks shaded with fuchsia
    And suddenly I'm withdrawn into nostalgia
    Of Christmas and sweet aromas

    Oh hello wintry days and romantic nights
    How I've wondered how you were
    And here we're to start again
    To attract the memories of holidays

    So I stand, below Father Christmas himself,
    Smiling towards his grandeur
    "Thank you for your gifts of white and blue"
    Merry Turkey Day, Merry Christmas




    Submitted on 2008-11-09 09:15:15     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This reminded me of someone I once knew. Very enjoyable.
    | Posted on 2009-07-24 00:00:00 | by TheQuestion | [ Reply to This ]
      Its absolutely all over the place,

    "Summer has come and gone
    Oh why has the sultry breezes
    Blown through my hair
    Only to leave a soft haunting caress?

    My bare feet long to feel the
    Warmth of the gritty sand
    Memories trail between
    Cold water and hot concrete

    In stead of the distant sunny rays
    Lies the brittle aroma of autumn
    Leaves the color of rusted metal
    Dance happily along the driveway

    Winter billows in the clouds above
    Casting gray shades of mellow temperament
    I hold out my hands, close my eyes
    And I dream"

    This was a great poem,the rest is laughable...

    honestly

    -Craig

    | Posted on 2008-11-30 00:00:00 | by Raphael | [ Reply to This ]


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