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    dots Submission Name: Her Gravedots
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    Author: Imaginth
    Elite Ratio:    5.18 - 43/50/19
    Words: 206
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    Description:
       For the child I lost due to a miscarriage.


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    dotsHer Gravedots
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    In her grave she lays,
    never took her first breath,
    never opened those delicate eyes,
    never held in her mother's arms.

    In her grave she rests,
    never kissed on the forehead by her father,
    never smiled toothless,
    never shown off to loved ones.

    In her grave she sleeps,
    never able to take her first steps,
    never touched her toys,
    never stuffed her tiny belly.

    In her grave she will lay cold,
    in her mother's daily thoughts,
    in her father's memories,
    in her sister's dreams.

    In her grave her body lies,
    in heaven her soul strives.




    Submitted on 2008-11-09 18:22:56     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      First let me say, i'm sorry for your loss. losing a child, esp through a miscarriage must be difficult. I just commented on another person's poem about miscarriage and thought I'd give yours a read as well.

    I think the sentiments portrayed here are sweet and endearing. There is the obvious emotion of sadness but there are stuble hints of love and tenderness for a child that never got the chance to enter our world.

    I think the ideas are layed out well. I get the urge to somehow save the little child and hold him or her, as if were that simple.

    Overall a sweet poem. May you find peace in a difficult time...
    | Posted on 2008-11-11 00:00:00 | by jaramae | [ Reply to This ]


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