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    dots Submission Name: Trenchesdots

    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 212
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
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    Clop !

    Clop !

    Ployp Plop !

    Clop !

    Is all I hear

    Above my head
    The ground beyond
    Has vented its thirsty anger

    Blop !

    Is it blood ?

    Drop !

    In the pools gathers
    Ruts of cloying mud

    Drop !

    Quiet now
    Save for the rattling hiss
    Of sneaking wire

    Drip !

    Am I the only one here

    Plop ployp !

    And the horses stank
    In their leaping cannons of shrapnel
    Blown apart

    Drip !

    I’ll wait

    Drop !

    I’ll stay here
    Ployp Plop !

    Here in the sound
    Of dripping

    Orange red and wet
    Ripping thunderous
    And I
    And I
    And I
    Hit burning
    Something burning hot

    Is it blood ?

    Drop !

    Plip !

    Plop !

    Blood in the runnels
    And scars
    Am I the only one here
    In sickening cold

    Blop !

    Blyp !

    I’ll wait here
    I’ll stay here

    Drop !

    Pllllyop !

    Drip drop !

    Plop !



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