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    dots Submission Name: Unraveling The Keydots

    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 278
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    dotsUnraveling The Keydots

    Unraveling The Key

    I painted on your shadow
    A picture of your skin
    Wandered in your darkness
    To end your suffering

    But the doors inside your mystery
    Were basking in the sun
    Drawing parallels to other dances
    Of discovering The Key

    The pages of your sorrow
    Were left to be read by none
    And the emptiness of our lives
    Left this thread of love undone

    Now the departed lay in hours of wishes
    At the feet of our quiet summer
    This is the ballet of those kisses
    Where the forlorn reach out to us forever

    Now you hide within a barb-ed cage
    The incarceration of all my destiny
    The trapping of the ragged days
    Of discovering The Key

    I became the smiling card cheat
    To earn your lies
    Knowing I would lose my heart beat
    In the pretense of your eyes

    As you discussed the debate of all
    All you would do for love
    How all worlds end seemed so small
    In the face of love

    Already you found me
    Upward diving into the blue
    Already released in me
    Every molecule of you

    Fool me beneath everything
    Fool me for believing in possibility
    And fool you for never unlocking
    Unraveling The Key

    And all this life has pondered another answer
    But for buried words to devastate
    Waited for the sustenance it would have found there
    And drank instead the falsehood you now emancipate


    All the years have by me flown
    And for those hold us responsible
    While I still hold your Key
    To unraveling your mystery of the impossible

    Submitted on 2008-11-11 19:18:02     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    When I read this it was easy to imagine this as a lesson in a poem and I mirrored these thoughts in what's going on in mylife right NOW


    love,peace,joy,abundanc3e & smiles to share
    tif ~*~
    | Posted on 2008-11-12 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]

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