You have some awesome pieces, Ren. I really liked the verse you used as repetition, it was a really wonderful poem. I can't think of anything you need to work on, to be honest. It just seemed perfect.
Not fair! xD
I'm the one with writers block. :)
This was written very well. I liked it very much and I can relate. The only thing I can say is that the repetition was fantastic, but I think that it would've sounded a bit better had you put it afer every two stanzas. It's great the way it is, and I like it very much. Just my opinion. Keep up the awesome work, and I'll keep reading
Submission Name: Alone Beautiful
