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    dots Submission Name: Blown Away ( Did The World End Today ) dots
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    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 320
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Description:
       previously posted, but now has slight changes in line breaks and some changes in words in a few verses....


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    dotsBlown Away ( Did The World End Today ) dots
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    Blown Away ( Did The World End Today )

    Falling in the ashen dusk
    Quiet streets are lined
    Laying beneath a pinked and rose set sky
    Everything painted in the same warm washed hue

    And blown away

    Far beyond the horizon speaks
    Where lonely clouds dream of peaks
    Snow and rain and not sun and sand
    Offers them a helping hand

    As they are blown away

    Falling there amidst the green
    Fronded palms wave gentle to the sea
    The dusking sky with its rim of pinks
    Takes hours to breath its sigh that cuddles the sun as she sinks

    Other realms in windows lit
    Reflect upon the playing day
    And in the corners were the webs have grown
    Dark and subtle words have shown

    They were blown away

    Blown away

    Breezing whisper of dunes and Sahara

    All blown away

    Blown away

    In ribbons the fairy lights of streets
    Telegraph messages of silent peace
    To rest their tired skipping feet
    On the other side of dawn

    Tracing the patina of yesterday
    Theirs in wisps and sheens of blues and greens
    The Earth revolves
    So far away

    And blown away

    What did you say

    Blown away

    As a kiss the failing light redeems
    All and everything
    Converging in its blanket breath
    And smiles for a moments rest

    And blows away

    And in the waking the light is cleaned
    Each and everything
    Has a brand new name
    Although they look the same

    They were all blown away

    And in the waking as the light is cleaned
    You and me and everything
    Are given a brand new name
    Although we look the same

    We know we where

    Blown away

    What did you say

    We were blown

    Blown away





    Submitted on 2008-11-11 22:20:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I don't know which stanza I like more:

    "Falling there amidst the green
    Fronded palms wave gentle to the sea
    The dusking sky with its rim of pinks
    Takes hours to breath its sigh that cuddles the sun as she sinks"

    or

    "As a kiss the failing light redeems
    All and everything
    Converging in its blanket breath
    And smiles for a moments rest"

    I don't even know how I managed to choose just two favourite stanzas from the entire masterpiece.

    Your work astounds me, as it usually does. I think I've been blown away :)
    (yes, that was a really bad attempt at a joke, but it failed... I know)
    | Posted on 2008-11-11 00:00:00 | by Iffy | [ Reply to This ]


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