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Rain falls outside; A roaring cascade Sounding of swaying waves- The world clawing and falling, Breathing and ceasing. Daffodils dance among eating ants. And I am sitting, Sitting on the verge while time ticks by. My ever evolving moment static, Gazing over the ledge... Into bliss or the abyss? My mind has walked the track To this question on most nights, Ever since we shared the sight; Lured and guided we were By that possibility that lay in the deep, That unknown that lives beyond Each from each. To that edge of our friendship We went and reached- Across to each other, Across the deep. But too far we were, Each from each. And dared we not To risk a fall too steep For a chance at a life That finds shelter in each. When I saw you turn, I thought I'd leap... Stretched arms and hands grasping For that hair, But then I would go down To...who knows where... So now I sit and ponder What I see over that edge, For down there lies what I don't know, A question I can't forget, A life that begs. And you, Down there lies you, You with I. The "Us" now Is of coy movements made Around that fire that seperates us When we're together; I fidget inside Because it reflects in your eyes, As it also does in mine. What if I jumped in? Immolating my present future To stand in our fire, To stand in the light of us. ...I wonder if you'd do the same I might not be single In my fear of change... But all signs say I wouldn't be alone in that flame. I see us burning together ...For better or worse. The rain deceased And still sitting were I started, I peer down and quote my friend Prufock, "Do I dare disturb the universe?" Do I over step the boundary, Leading each to each, To shared smiles and weeps? |
I really liked this. I agree; it was beautifully written. It had amazing imagery. The only thing I have to say about it was that at times, it rhymed and at times it didn't- I thought that disrupted the flow a little. But I overall I liked it. Great job. Keep writing!Thanks. | Posted on 2008-11-12 00:00:00 | by bananafish | [ Reply to This ] | This was beautifully written. I don't have a negitive thing to say. I can relate to this perfecty. I'm in the same situation and I know the questions that haunt. Timid steps end the journey without the satisfaction that running can give. Keep up the great work, and I'll keep reading. | »Haely« | Posted on 2008-11-12 00:00:00 | by MinervaBlu | [ Reply to This ] | |