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    dots Submission Name: Come what maydots
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    Author: SAGITTREVEALED
    ASL Info:    22/m/ P.C. FL
    Elite Ratio:    3.89 - 26/26/16
    Words: 95
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Happy
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    dotsCome what maydots
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    How do I know what may be.
    All I know is what I see.
    I see you troubled, just looking down.
    and how I wish I was the Ground.
    "Today I'm playful," is what you decree.
    Oh, how your smile and laughter set me free.
    I keep "him" chained, afraid that you'll leave.
    all you do is point out the heart on your sleeve.
    always for your happiness I am concerned.
    and always to me your eyes have returned.
    Even though it sounds so very cliché'
    I will be beside you eternally, COME WHAT MAY.




    Submitted on 2008-11-12 06:49:59     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      As I will be beside you.
    | Posted on 2008-11-12 00:00:00 | by dismal_s child | [ Reply to This ]


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