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    dots Submission Name: THE HEAVENS PREY dots
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    Author: jamar2
    ASL Info:    52/male/Ireland
    Elite Ratio:    2.22 - 53/46/75
    Words: 106
    Class/Type: Poetry/Legend
    Total Views: 608
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 682



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       A piece written many moons ago now, so would be greatful if someone could not spare the rod with this one,


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    Prostitute yourself to the heavens, the Gods,
    Sacrifice your soul take a beating from the rods.
    Let those on earth fight for the salic law,
    The beasts of mankind forlorn for evermore.

    Distinguish your voice abundant and entwining,
    Espouse the cherubs and join in the dining.
    Propose a toast let not the paynims be revenant,
    But for all in song declare, be elegant.

    The pantisocracy of the heavens where men abide,
    Take up their horse through the wind do ride.
    Exonerate from the wars castrate the Kings power,
    Let not the infidel come rise, but to cower.





    Submitted on 2008-11-12 17:00:37     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      So, I HATE rhyming poetry, but this worked really well!
    Although, I had no idea what "phynims" are nor do I know what "pantisocracy" means.

    The whole piece has a very lyrical feel, and I like the flow.
    | Posted on 2008-11-17 00:00:00 | by evermoon | [ Reply to This ]


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