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    dots Submission Name: Isn't Heredots
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    Author: ThisIsReal
    ASL Info:    22-M-Lost
    Elite Ratio:    4.27 - 182/194/88
    Words: 126
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 108
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 842



    Description:
       circa 2005, and no idea why i wrote it


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    dotsIsn't Heredots
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    Looking back on my years
    and how they've gone,
    Realizing that I'm not myself,
    and haven't been for so long


    That sweet little boy
    who always seemed to care,
    I don't have to look hard
    to know that he isn't there

    I can see where it all started
    How I slipped away
    even as everyone else
    tried to get me to stay

    Sinking into a pit,
    one created by myself
    Hiding my battered heart
    up upon a shelf

    I think it's time to leave
    to find me once more
    and a place for me
    where I wasn't before

    I don't know where I'm going
    or how to get there
    but there's still a place for me
    it just isn't here




    Submitted on 2008-11-13 04:48:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I took one of your least commented on poems to see why. Perhaps it is too realistic and self explantory for comment. I liked it since the person spoken of semingly is trying to find some scenery in an otherwise blah life . It reminds me of a quite frequent phenomenom of "mid-life crisis."
    | Posted on 2008-11-18 00:00:00 | by realpoet | [ Reply to This ]
      This poem reminds me of some of my own work which therefore leads me to instantly like it.

    Through this poem, you can see themes of change and evolution but what makes this poem different from other poems dealing with finding out who you really are, is that the end result doesn't exactly lead you to a clearly defined individual. Instead, the reader is left wondering where this individual is, seemingly still lost on the journey to self-identity....well at least, that is the impression I got.

    I enjoyed how possibility, uncertainty and realization have somehow found a place within this poem. It makes for a nice mix.

    Minor error:
    spelling - 'created'

    Overall, I really enjoyed it and shall look into reading more of your work in the future
    | Posted on 2008-11-13 00:00:00 | by jaramae | [ Reply to This ]



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