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    dots Submission Name: Don'tdots
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    Author: ThisIsReal
    ASL Info:    22-M-Lost
    Elite Ratio:    4.27 - 182/194/88
    Words: 131
    Class/Type: Poetry/Venting
    Total Views: 100
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 851



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       winter of 2007. I was pretty pissed that lisa was holding me at arm's length. Lets just say that it was wasted, lol


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    Don't play me for a fool
    We both know I've been there
    Don't hold me off forever
    it just isn't fair
    to either of us
    to waste what could be had
    on school age bullshit
    So once again I say
    Don't play me for a fool
    we both know I've been there
    It wouldn't be fair to you
    to squander the world
    well the one that is mine
    It may not be much
    but at least it is real
    and you'd be it's center
    and so much more
    But for one last time
    I implore you to take heed
    Don't play me for a fool
    it just wouldn't be fair
    to someone else out there
    who wouldn't waste this
    So know what your doing
    before it's wasted
    well for you anyways




    Submitted on 2008-11-13 04:55:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      not too bad. i can definitely understand the frustration behind this. i have definitely felt the annoyance of constantly being pushed away. i did like how you said "you'd be its center." that was quite a nice image. however, i was a bit underwhelmed with the whole thing. I feel like there is more that could have been written here, another dimension, perhaps. maybe im wrong. anyway, it wasn't knock-yer-socks-off, but it wasn't lord-you-suck, either.

    i tip my hat and bid thee farewell.
    | Posted on 2008-11-13 00:00:00 | by PoeticNonsense | [ Reply to This ]



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