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    dots Submission Name: Remember Whendots
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    Author: Flynn
    ASL Info:    24/M/MI
    Elite Ratio:    3.77 - 74/123/48
    Words: 383
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Love
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       A writing I wrote. Just now.


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    dotsRemember Whendots
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    Remember when we said everything was gonna
    Was going to be okay
    And we
    Because I
    And my heart felt
    And the skies are parting and His hand is reaching down
    The rapture of emotion
    The apocalypse stands still
    And It feels like the split second before a car crash
    Even the rain falls slowly
    Mixing with out tears
    And our shattered hearts
    Because I
    And my heart felt

    And we told ourselves none of that matters
    No none of that matters any more
    None of this matters anymore
    And we lied to our souls.

    And I feel the need for something
    I’m down on my hands and knees
    In my heart a fools assumption
    An organ of honesty.
    And I feel the need for something
    Only God can give to me
    I will read of it until then
    Till the time when have forgiven me

    Walking across that horizon
    Our footsteps are fading away
    Just fading away
    With the other’s that I’ve adopted
    Because I
    And we
    And we are no more
    We never really were. Never really are.
    When the cars crashed
    When the glass shatters slowly, levitating in the air
    With the rain
    And with the tears
    It doesn’t matter any more.
    Because I
    And my heart felt

    And I feel the need for something
    I’m down on my hands and knees
    In my heart a fools assumption
    An organ of honesty.
    And I feel the need for something
    Only God can give to me
    I will read of it until then
    Till the time when have forgiven me

    And His hand stole my heart away.
    Stole our hearts away
    In their stead is the broken glass
    Stabbing into our ribs
    Because I
    I will be there
    And we
    Were so lonely
    Until you
    And now we are here

    Even in the midst of the crash
    A spark still flies
    We will be together if we will be anything
    At all

    And I feel the need for something
    I’m down on my hands and knees
    In my heart a fools assumption
    An organ of honesty.
    And I feel the need for something
    Only God can give to me
    I will read of it until then
    Till the time when have forgiven me




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      Good song. Thanks for sharing.
    | Posted on 2013-01-17 00:00:00 | by CrypticBard | [ Reply to This ]


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