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Author: Krinchinian
ASL Info:    20/f/pa
Elite Ratio:    3.12 - 164 /231 /84
Words: 87
Class/Type: Poetry /Serious
Total Views: 859
Average Vote:    5.0000
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Just something that popped into my head in chemistry when i was thinking about how much i missed my bf cuz i didn't get to talk to him for 2 days.


Forgotten



Remember when eternity changed
Left life danglin on a string
My heart a dark endless hole
Lost on the street I know so well
Watching you walk away
Sidewalks exploding under me
Doors become sealed shut
Hallway that signafies life
No opportunites opening up
Thrown out with the trash
Playing your recorded voice again
Just to feel a second of hope
Memories gone with the wind
An empty shell occupying space
Gathering dust with the years
Chalk erased from a blackboard
Never to be thought of again




Submitted on 2008-11-13 14:19:59     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I love it. It explains so much. It expresses feeling.
| Posted on 2008-11-14 00:00:00 | by stormybluerose | [ Reply to This ]


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