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    dots Submission Name: Writer's handsdots

    Author: dismal_s child
    ASL Info:    19/F/On A Carousel
    Elite Ratio:    3.24 - 451/419/172
    Words: 87
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 755
    Average Vote:    3.6667
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       Written today during the poetry Jam at school.

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    dotsWriter's handsdots

    Her hands lay inkstained
    trying to hide in her lap
    beyond the pen blots they're plain
    maybe even a little sad

    Nails no longer neat
    jagged edges just appear
    no polish adorns she
    bitten too often for toxins I fear

    Rings try to spruce up
    like little gardens in front of shacks
    rings from friends and her love
    with a look they take her back

    With pens or keyboards
    her hands try to convey
    her most important worsds
    the things she longs to say

    Submitted on 2008-11-13 21:29:55     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      so thats pretty good you just wrote that on the spot there.... cool.... i do that sometimes. you may not remember me you commented on something of mine a while aago we never really talked that i remember of.... my fault!
    | Posted on 2009-02-09 00:00:00 | by AeThe Lost Poet | [ Reply to This ]
      hey and hi thanx for the comment on my posts
    to me it was a bunch of gibberish and was thinking alot of people thought so to

    i liked w
    how you ended this poem you wrote you could of said so much more but you left the reared wanting to read more

    good job and thanx again
    | Posted on 2008-11-18 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]
      So much about about a person is visible in their hands. And, hands I think are fascinating and beautiful. A man's hands, muscled and with bulging veins, a child's dainty and fragile fingers, a woman's elegant hands with long manicured, jeweled fingers, all tell a story about the person.

    Your delightful verse has much feeling in it, and belies a longer, deeper story about the subject.

    Nice work!
    | Posted on 2008-11-17 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
      those hands, i still see:

    tiny perfect doll-sized hands, i counted every finger on them while you were still fresh from birth and kissed them and cried.

    small, dimpled wrapped around a toothbrush at three, holding your green teddy bear upside down by a paw...

    later, at six, those little hands stroking the silky fur of the family dog,

    at ten, with painted ladybugs adorning each tiny half-moon nail, those little hands with fading tan, digging in the sandbox, building castles there in the park...

    those hands which reached, at fifteen for the keyboard and the pen, constructing infant rhymes and counting meter, blue paint chipped on the edge of your pinky nail...

    those precious hands in which you have always held your mother's heart, my Little One,

    i love you.

    | Posted on 2008-11-15 00:00:00 | by ruejacobs | [ Reply to This ]
      Writer's hands as they may be they are perfect, as are you. They can and do more on a daily basis. They pull my deepest thoughts out and force me to break the peace of my inner-monolouge. just to feel your hand on mine stirrs thoughts the I have never had before. They are more than writer's hands, They are true Magick.
    To you from yours
    Great Piece of work Hunnybear!
    | Posted on 2008-11-14 00:00:00 | by SAGITTREVEALED | [ Reply to This ]

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