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    dots Submission Name: Armageddondots
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    Author: Jimi James
    ASL Info:    24/m/somehwere
    Elite Ratio:    6.16 - 90/78/41
    Words: 68
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 1011
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 519



    Description:
       last battle between good and evil.
    sorry no spaceships.
    "armageddon" sounds cheap.
    an opinion on ... think for yourself.


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    dotsArmageddondots
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    a step into depth;
    a grip out.
    moans the sun,
    squirms horror.

    lonely all the atoms,
    chromosomes and knots
    left by sense,
    sin through sobs.

    the corners clench,
    join the last war,
    the relics of all.

    word and wisdom inside;
    knitting, sewing, crochetting,
    rags children bring.



    we are the good.
    we are the bad.
    we are the gracious;
    the gracious blind flood.




    Submitted on 2008-11-13 21:39:30     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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