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    dots Submission Name: Hello Worlddots
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    Author: SDodson
    ASL Info:    18/f/fl
    Elite Ratio:    4.65 - 35/22/21
    Words: 258
    Class/Type: Personal Quotes/Them
    Total Views: 911
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1761



    Description:
       I've given up so many people
    I've held onto so much hatred and anger towards those that I decided I didn't like.
    It took my dad dying to know that I can't always have a second chance.
    Some things are final.
    That scares me.
    When I die I want someone to speak at my funeral


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    dotsHello Worlddots
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    Hello world
    This is me
    Looking to the sky
    Remembering the days when I thought I could fly
    Hearing his voice again
    Hearing my choice again
    I abandoned you
    And everyone else
    I remember the fights
    I remember the fireworks, the sounds, the lights
    I miss you
    I'm sorry
    Letting go
    Trying to go on
    So cliché Like a sad song
    Remember me?
    Looking at you like you were the world?
    You were
    You are
    And now I am
    I see his smiles
    How could you leave me?
    Did I not smile like that?
    When I hold him and he hugs me
    When I leave and he cries
    How could you leave me?
    How could I leave you?
    She wasn't my best friend
    That would mean we wouldn't be friends anymore
    She was just someone I knew
    I was never convinced of that though
    I walked away
    Silent
    Angry
    Hateful
    Hello world
    This is me
    I am free
    of the burdens
    placed upon me
    I am open and honest
    Caring and kind
    I am not the same person
    I was behind
    all those crimes of aggression
    I am new
    REINVENTED
    it's too late
    for him
    it's too late
    I love you daddy
    I always have
    Hello Heaven
    take him home
    with open arms
    hold him close
    love him
    like we all should have
    mend that broken man
    Remorse
    My new talent
    Remorse for myself and those around me
    You didn't do me wrong
    I just didn't agree that it was right
    I'm sorry So sorry
    Rest in Peace




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      "I walked away/Silent/Angry/Hatefu/Hello World/This is me..." This is extremely deep and a strong piece. I don't know how to describe it, but somehow it is... darkly whimsical? Hm, no, that's not the word for it... Anyway, it has a distinct feel to it indicating your style.

    And of course, the spelling, capitalization, and so on were impeccable, which is rare. Even more rare is when a writer comes up with a vivid, deep "featured" piece. And so you have done.

    Slainte,

    DW
    | Posted on 2008-12-24 00:00:00 | by Shadowstar13 | [ Reply to This ]
      hi hun, i loved reading this, it gave me goosebumps and it made me want to read more,
    great write keep em cummin
    x x x
    | Posted on 2008-12-05 00:00:00 | by secret kisses | [ Reply to This ]
      Omg This is such a great write i think this is a really easy to read well flowing deliver of a story that has the reader namely myself in this instance being swept up in the angst and negative energy and then discover the wonder of new mindsets and positive energy.

    We are a product of our environment and with each day as we grow wiser we learn and grow stronger from our experiences... I'm stoked that you have this skill to share this piece with us .

    Thank you

    Timmy S. Edgar © 2008
    | Posted on 2008-11-15 00:00:00 | by Timmy S. Edgar | [ Reply to This ]


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