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    Author: Lilyan
    ASL Info:    1 Elite Years
    Elite Ratio:    2.56 - 42/38/26
    Words: 87
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Misc
    Total Views: 141
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    I am standing under the tree thinking how its appearance have changed.
    Like only few days ago tree was shining with its leaves and brown long branches, it seemed so vivacious and beautiful.
    Like a moment ago, leaves were flying
    trought the cold air and finnaly landed on the green grass and stayed there motionless, like they were dead.
    Know when i look at it, it seems so sad, lonely, brances have lost their shining brown color and seem debilitated, they have lost their strenght and bright.




    Submitted on 2008-11-14 17:17:52     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Your imagery is really fantastic...The change of the seasons is awesome.

    I feel that with this piece that you could expand so much further with it as it has that eerie unfinished feel, structuring your piece here into stanzas helps your readers as well.

    Yet in saying that i enjoyed reading this piece.

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    Timmy S. Edgar © 2008
    | Posted on 2008-11-15 00:00:00 | by Timmy S. Edgar | [ Reply to This ]


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