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    dots Submission Name: The Perfect Guydots
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    Author: Anneboleyn707
    ASL Info:    18/Female/Pennsylvania
    Elite Ratio:    3.96 - 44/84/67
    Words: 381
    Class/Type: Poetry/Comedy
    Total Views: 909
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 2418



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    dotsThe Perfect Guydots
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    Oh me! I can't decide
    What boy is really true?
    One whos handsome, funny, loyal
    Smart, and romantic too

    I need someone who can match my wit
    But who's not too clever for me
    Someone very opinionated
    Who can compromise and agree

    I have searched the world twice over
    And alas have come to find
    Not one of the men I have fancied
    Has been of exactly the right kind



    I'll tell you…


    The popular guy was too cocky
    He always had another gig
    The nerd was really ugly
    And the footballer was too big

    The gothic kid was pretty nice
    Until he bought some fangs
    And the ghetto boy from down the street
    Only took walks with his gangs

    The shy boy who sent me flowers
    Wasnt cute for very long
    I dont know why but it freaked me out
    When he asked about our wedding song

    And at first I thought bad boys were great
    Truly sensitive deep down—men with a hidden avail
    Well...the one I liked tried robbing a bank
    Now hes serving up to ten years in jail

    Along came the classic school hottie…
    Making every girl swoon with his "heyy"ss
    Yeah, too bad for me when I found out
    I was only his girlfriend on Tuesdays

    Poor Billy was too short
    Robbys pick up lines were lame
    Jake and Tom had amazing reflexes
    Because they were always glued to a video game

    Jesse was long-distance
    Wed probably be together still
    But I couldnt stop my dad from breaking it off
    When he saw last months phone bill

    Then, yes, okay call me shallow
    But Dans looks were so uniquely attractive
    Until puberty came along and hit him hard
    Can anybody say Proactive?

    And lastly (I hope) there was Chelly
    To die for! Quirky,friendly, and astute
    But I just had to ask what was up with that name
    And thats when I found out his boyfriend thinks its cute

    So in all I guess I'm still on the hunt
    For an impossibly compatible guy, but not to fret!
    E-harmony has assured me my perfect match is out there somewhere
    I just haven't found him yet.





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      Hehe! :) This is funny. I must say though that maybe you're doing it wrong. I can only speak from personal experience but the best relationships I ever had always came up when I wasn't looking for anything. Quite the contrary, most of the times I was just breaking up with someone and didn't really feel like starting a new relationship. What I'm trying to say is that you should never try to force anything but rather go along with it if the person seems really interesting...
    | Posted on 2012-10-10 00:00:00 | by Paradox | [ Reply to This ]
      It was wham,bam,funny. Yeah it just a fun way of describin,a journey many of us have taken tho i doubt if the majority had so many names. I never put anything as my fave and probably wont make a love theme one my fave. But this would have bein the exception just that i havent gotten round to knowin how to make a poem a fave. Thanks i loved it
    | Posted on 2011-11-08 00:00:00 | by Temidayo | [ Reply to This ]
      You are funny, chica-lette. :) I thoroughly enjoyed this. Truly so. I liked your rhythm patterns throughout... altho I tongue-tripped on the line with "avail"... it seemed like a bit of a speed bump.

    People sometimes count syllables on me... I know in my head the little foot-skips i throw into something for a "musical lilt" are often lost in their marching-stomp through the words. I dug your lilts... they curved around my tongue delightfully. They made me smile. Not many use them.

    You're a delight to discover here. Down to your screen name. I'll be reading you quite a bit methinks...

    | Posted on 2011-05-21 00:00:00 | by Runes | [ Reply to This ]
      I truely enjoyed this. Such a difficult subject in life and you had me laughing the whole time. Not only is it actually insightful, but very entertaining. So, how much of it has truely happened in your life? Thank you, I really enjoyed this. Take Care.
    | Posted on 2009-01-05 00:00:00 | by wishmaster1256 | [ Reply to This ]
      I apreciate the longing for a successful hunt, for I hunt as well, for the same you ask, just not of one who shares my gender, lol. This is worded quite well, and I found nothing that required, asked for, or even made me think of critiqing. My advice though, try plentyoffish.com, it's free and has more members, lol.
    | Posted on 2008-11-15 00:00:00 | by ThisIsReal | [ Reply to This ]
      lol. I liked this, all of it was quite true and I totally agree.

    The beginning is a little rocky BUT the piece definitely proves itself with the rest. It was great.
    | Posted on 2008-11-15 00:00:00 | by Rayelyn | [ Reply to This ]


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