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    dots Submission Name: A Million Poemsdots

    Author: Anneboleyn707
    ASL Info:    18/Female/Pennsylvania
    Elite Ratio:    3.96 - 44/84/67
    Words: 222
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    dotsA Million Poemsdots

    I could write a million poems
    None of them would flow but it's all I can do
    This pen on this page has an automatic motion
    That for some reason still wills simple verses about you
    What is really happening?
    Our paths have crossed and wandered far
    Deep down I'm caught drifting along crookedly
    Back when we were,
    Before we will be,
    And now we are

    I'm lost wondering the reasons
    Even statistics and facts couldn't make this thing real
    I can't stop them and these driven temptations running up and down my spine
    Are the only sensations that I have left to feel
    There's some consequence
    And I thought I could handle it
    But some secret discovery has lent you all my doubt
    I wouldn't care
    But this pride isn't mine
    And now I can't prove what it is I really care about

    Insignificant regret wont change what I said
    And instant replays only reveal what went wrong
    But a million poems is barely enough to convery
    What it's felt like here since the day you've been gone
    For someone like you,
    My lines aren't skilled
    But these rhymes on this page are all I can do
    Our paths have crossed and wandered away
    But I'm stuck in love with you

    Submitted on 2008-11-14 23:25:59     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Really enjoyed reading this. Best parts for me were "This pen on this page has an automatic motion" and "But some secret discovery has lent you all my doubt ". Well done.
    | Posted on 2008-11-16 00:00:00 | by chilliboy | [ Reply to This ]

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