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    dots Submission Name: Be Heredots
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    Author: ThisIsReal
    ASL Info:    25-M-/Found
    Elite Ratio:    4.27 - 182/194/89
    Words: 312
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 722
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1964



    Description:
       I wrote this, along with several others, in the spring of 2007, in process of rekindling things wiith a beloved ex. I'm not sure if even she has read it before, but who the hell knows eh?


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    dotsBe Heredots
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    It all started
    with one stoned line
    On the day that we met
    I didn't know at the time
    I had been touched by fate
    and graced by love
    making me look at myself
    wanting to rise above
    my bad reputation
    and my dark history
    wanting to be so much more
    than the mess that was me

    So I started getting around
    and made her part of my life
    I asked her to be a mother
    and to become my wife
    To walk with me
    through the trials of hell
    to laugh with me
    when it all goes well
    She accepted it all
    chose to stay with me
    but what I envisioned then
    proved not to be

    Everything just slipped apart
    for most of which I am to blame
    So in the days I live now
    my heart cries her name
    My arms long
    to wrap around her once more
    I reach out in my sleep
    to where she was before
    Grabbing open space
    my hands fall to the bed
    with echos of her voice
    filling my head
    It's been 2 years
    and still I long
    to make right
    my every wrong
    Each one done to her
    that she never deserved
    To be able to give her my love
    for her alone reserved

    Others may try
    to change my mind
    but my feelings for her
    shall never be left behind
    In exchange
    for a lesser vice
    No other lover
    could ever suffice
    To fill the void
    that's inside of me
    A place reserved
    for only sharati
    The woman I love
    the one I miss
    The first person in a long time
    to bring me bliss
    A love to hold out
    beyond my end in dust
    I will wait forever
    If I must
    to hold her close
    and whisper in her ear
    "My dearest love,
    I will always be here"




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