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    dots Submission Name: Winter Firedots
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    Author: all2rest
    Elite Ratio:    3.75 - 30/40/34
    Words: 183
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsWinter Firedots
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    These winter nights call out for warming fires to melt our frozen souls

    In which our hearts, entombed in ice, may burn beneath our bones.

    This feeble frame cracks and pops aloud as the flames keep growing higher

    and in my chest I feel the heat that kindles my desires.

    The chilling air has no retort against foggy breath passing o'er my tongue

    Released into the void of night as I sigh with my head hung.

    Stretch out your hands to catch the fleeing sparks that wander through

    the dark black sea of winter breeze that suddenly surrounds you.

    Move in closer, squeeze in tight, the fire turns to flames

    which in turn have weakened to embers, still glowing all the same.

    The blaze has softened gently, in time the cold will overcome

    and in my chest I feel my heart still beating steady as a drum

    It too will turn to embers glowing brighter with each passing wind

    until there's nothing left to burn and ice over again.




    Submitted on 2008-11-15 09:02:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      bit old fashion, predictable, but it works
    | Posted on 2008-11-17 00:00:00 | by gjenkins | [ Reply to This ]


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