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    dots Submission Name: Organised insanitydots

    Author: rubymoon
    Elite Ratio:    4.08 - 155/162/91
    Words: 154
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 829
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    dotsOrganised insanitydots

    A drop, enough to tip the scales

    ... a long fall... into insanity

         An explosion inwards

    Fingers, clawing into flesh

    ... climb outwards... or inwards to

         The source of aggravation

    Perfection, margins to bound

    ... putting off... the binds of sanity

         Thousands little deaths

    Drown, sound of insanity

    ... focus... on something else

         Anything and everything

    Teach me the road

    The path

    that leads into sanity


    the new sanity for me

    walks alone

    leading on bleeding feet

    Ironically, no way out

    and no way leads in

    but there is a path

    that leads chaos

    into the heart

    of humans


    & chaos

    Submitted on 2008-11-15 13:07:06     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Hi Rubymoon. You have actually solved the problem in"Wings".

    Psa 91:4 He shall cover thee with his feathers, and under his wings shalt thou find refuge: his truth is a shield and buckler.
    Psa 91:11 For he shall give his angels charge concerning thee, to keep thee in all thy ways:
    Psa 91:13 Thou shalt tread upon the lion and the adder; the young lion and the dragon shalt thou trample under foot.

    Keep faith - be you and Fly! Joachim.
    | Posted on 2008-12-06 00:00:00 | by Joachim | [ Reply to This ]
      My only negative is that you use the word insanity a little too often. I normally do not like then people play with the "look" of the words on the page, but you have done so in a manner that does not annoy me or distract me.

    I like that this speaks to the inherent cycle of nature and the cycle inside all of us. All things move form order to chaos to order and back again over and over till the end of all things. If you every watch the movie SLC Punk they touch on this concept a little toward the end.
    | Posted on 2008-11-17 00:00:00 | by nicodemous | [ Reply to This ]
      wow. That is all I have to say. WOW.
    | Posted on 2008-11-15 00:00:00 | by dancer-of-words | [ Reply to This ]

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