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    dots Submission Name: Welcome of The Palms Ovationdots
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    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 110
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nature
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    dotsWelcome of The Palms Ovationdots
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    Welcome of The Palms Ovation

    Cold sharp dawn
    Of chrome lit silver
    Dusty summer heat no more
    Clean polished sun
    Risen in perfect sea of azure skies

    The lines of palms
    Are twinkling suffused natures decorative
    Flimsy delicate tips
    Of fronds caught dancing
    Shimmer and shimmy together
    With a soft winds breezing
    Glitter electric in their
    Skyward dusting reach

    Shivered light from their stretching arms
    Random ballets sparkle
    Catching stars of falling water
    Hang momentum frozen
    As with spangled flitter
    The Palms are talking
    In tones of daylight fireworks
    Pyrotechnic fountains
    Of scintillations green

    Soft explosion spray
    Their anthem of beauty
    To the breaking day




    Submitted on 2008-11-15 17:38:19     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Palms. We don't have many palm trees where I live, but we have coconut trees a go-go and they're, I guess, in the palm tree family. Palms have five fingers, hands have five fingers, standing ovations, clapping, hands---! Palms are green, electric lights are green...?
    I don't know. Don't get it. Beyond my powers of comprehension.
    But I really like the tone, it's very lyrical. Really clever use of words. I especially like "scintillations". The imagery is really beautiful.

    Palms at sundown?
    | Posted on 2008-11-17 00:00:00 | by Lacrimosa | [ Reply to This ]


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