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    dots Submission Name: Like putting that spray cheese stuff on those bbq dots
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    Author: Cannablisjunkie
    ASL Info:    22/Male/Indianapolis, IN
    Elite Ratio:    2.59 - 77/147/87
    Words: 137
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 837
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    Description:
       About a girl, she didn't.


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    dotsLike putting that spray cheese stuff on those bbq dots
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    She's a cheese ball, always
    cheesin' with tears like waterfalls
    from eyes bleedin.' (clear liquids!)

    But, she's not sad yet happy!
    To be loungin' around in my company.
    It's relaxing, being there on the ground spinning
    arms wrapped around sides laughing

    At each others cries!
    ..Is exciting just to be able to see
    the way in which the world cannot be.. all lies.

    To have been side by side coinciding
    minds alike in improvising the ways
    we'll blink, speak, and think we ought to be doing so..

    At the peak like springs young bright glow
    birds and owls in hollow holes
    will 'whoo' and sing as night comes and goes..
    Reminding me of mornings i'd wake up next to you
    still asleep, like before I went to bed just as beauitful.




    Submitted on 2008-11-17 01:59:45     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Haha Nice one.
    I especially like the ending. Good stuff man! good stuff!

    Hey man holla at you boy.
    w0rdyB
    | Posted on 2008-11-19 00:00:00 | by wordyb | [ Reply to This ]


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