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    dots Submission Name: Faith, Pt. 2; Submission.dots

    Author: awastedsky
    ASL Info:    22/f/AZ
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    dotsFaith, Pt. 2; Submission.dots

    Does it
    my willingness to
    take the plunge into
    something so unknown? Or can
    I tiptoe with my hand outstretched,
    my eyes sealed shut, praying that you
    would be ever so willing to hold me?
    Do I have to watch as my world is
    ripped from underneath my feet, and
    I tumble swiftly to the
    ground, trusting you to break
    my fall? I'm begging
    you, don't let go;
    I need you
    this time.

    Submitted on 2008-11-17 06:59:30     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Interesting structure. I also like the way you place the poem inside the two words. Starting out on Faith and slowly falling into and finishing with Trust.

    "Or can I tiptoe with my hand outstretched,
    my eyes sealed shut, praying that you
    would be ever so willing to hold me?" < that's a charming image.

    Faith and Trust are quite similar but can also be a bit different. Trust puts things on a more personal level.

    | Posted on 2008-11-17 00:00:00 | by TamarRoze | [ Reply to This ]

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