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    dots Submission Name: Songbird Skull c. by ruejacobs dots
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    Author: ruejacobs
    ASL Info:    37/feminazi/Gehenna
    Elite Ratio:    4.91 - 566/440/154
    Words: 191
    Class/Type: Poetry/
    Total Views: 189
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       it's about Caesars and children
    or gods and poets...


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    dotsSongbird Skull c. by ruejacobs dots
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    c. by ruejacobs 11/17/08 4 A.M.

    "i think i am becoming a god."

    he ate figs from the branches
    like an old he-goat
    still that fluttering beast
    beneath the lattice of ribs
    galloped him to the grave

    you can cover Orpheus' head
    with a cloth
    like a parrot's cage
    ('Be silent, Pretty Bird.')
    but still it washes up on the shore

    lyre strings and figs
    god's blood as pale as watered ale
    a tongue rooted in apathy
    and weaned on regret

    a song, a scream, a shout:
    i felt mortality
    brush against my lips
    just repeating such a thing

    i painted the fruit in the garden
    in promising hues
    prosperity
    long life
    and happiness

    happiness but never peace

    it was the northman's
    the desert marauder's
    the pirate's jolly roger

    bouncing on the waves, that head

    from maenad's hands to this
    don't turn your back
    on your benefactor

    lest your tongue
    be bereft of its animate host

    the empty cage
    the unstrung harp

    then at last a footnote
    for Dante's drudging pen





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    ||| Comments |||
      my mother is a poet.
    | Posted on 2009-05-03 00:00:00 | by PopRocksRae | [ Reply to This ]
      I like this one. Although I'm a bit weary of the subject matter myself I can not say I didn't enjoy it. The ending could have been better but other than that this is a good poem.
    | Posted on 2008-11-21 00:00:00 | by Paradox | [ Reply to This ]
      Quite a way with words you have here. I'm impressed and inspired.

    "that fluttering beast
    beneath the lattice of ribs
    galloped him to the grave"

    plus

    "a tongue rooted in apathy
    and weaned on regret" - <yes, that's the kind of writing I enjoy, and wish I could write.

    I like the 'parrot's cage" thing too.

    Very nice. I enjoyed!
    | Posted on 2008-11-17 00:00:00 | by TamarRoze | [ Reply to This ]
      Good Work, Mother.
    I absolutly loved the part of the piece that was,
    "a tongue rooted in apathy
    and weaned on regret"
    It has such a "mommy-esque" feel.
    Nice to know you're feeling better.

    Love and Hugs.
    Kisses and Misses.
    | Posted on 2008-11-17 00:00:00 | by dismal_s child | [ Reply to This ]


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