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    dots Submission Name: Breathlessdots

    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 180
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    Every touch dies
    Urgent moments from you
    Each kiss a voiceless whisper
    Around you floats an undying breathless

    Cool chilled your curls
    Lay pensive at porcelain shoulders
    Awaiting the warmth of
    Assignations love

    Each caress withers
    At a horizons touch beyond you
    A singular worship
    To the sanctity of the lost

    The Aeon of caress
    Promises divided by consent
    Fall silent
    Dumb witness to the heavens

    Sleepless nights echo from your pillow
    Coverlet of tears pressed to the aching soul
    Dreams you dream alone
    Between forgetful sheets of night

    Every voiceless reaching toward fullness
    Poised within an instant
    Its colours succinct to a deeper shade
    An innocent heretic refusing to repent

    Out there in the never ending embrace of want
    The soft wrapping of your arms
    Linger on holding so close
    Made breathless by the touch

    So far away in a presence
    Of drifting destiny
    The concord of your tears
    Wept in the quiet hours of eternity

    Reveal me
    Release me
    Free me

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      ..........! Do you want to know something ridiculous? the first time I read this I was at school and it completly dazed me, so much that I fell of my chair (yes, I'm still being teased about it).

    I think it was this stanza that caused it:

    "Out there in the never ending embrace of want
    The soft wrapping of your arms
    Linger on holding so close
    Made breathless by the touch"

    It still has the power to give me goosebumps.

    I have to thank you, for writing, and for keeping on writing. Your works are one of the few aspects of my life that are a pleasure to visit time and time again.

    Don't ever stop, please, and I mean that with utmost sincerity.

    till next time

    ~Love Iffy
    | Posted on 2008-11-18 00:00:00 | by Iffy | [ Reply to This ]

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