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    dots Submission Name: Death of The Monkey King dots
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    Author: col13x
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    dotsDeath of The Monkey King dots
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    Death of The Monkey King ( for my friend Neil Lloyd )

    Cave men half human monkeys
    Sat gibbering and snarling
    Perched all around his garden wall
    Bestial vandals waving sticks and spears
    Pointing angry at their own reflections
    Fingering him as hidden
    He peered nervous through his dark dim kitchen window

    One of the brutals held a stake
    And to crude spike was thrust
    The rough severed golden crowned head
    Of the Half Monkey King
    Hawked on high
    As if to salute a battle cry
    The cave men humanoids
    Squawked and raged their threatening
    From the ledge of his garden wall

    “My first thoughts were of escape” he said
    “But then NO ! I’ll go out
    “chase them away
    “do battle
    “if I have to.”

    And so grabbing his own ready stick
    He ran out challenging
    Shouting and yelling
    Out into the thick of them all

    Surprised confused these monkey android animals
    Retreated and ran their cadre
    Running off up the back alley way
    And so slinging on his back
    Another ready sack filled weapons
    And other assorted machine guns
    He gave to the chase
    To hunt these noisome villains down

    “RUN ! RUN ! From the Monkeys
    “HIDE ! GO HOME !” he yelled through the streets
    and loaded his riffle as he went
    hunting until he found them
    a gathered coercion of a crowd
    he shot one
    just one
    as it was edged on by its cohorts
    the brute made a dash screaming its madness
    only to meet the quick controlled shot

    The others all fled

    And then he woke up

    And then in waking
    With the strangest thing he thought
    Heard from out his bedroom window
    A muffled snarling
    Caught him drawing back the curtain
    To see about his garden wall perching
    A thousand cave human half monkeys
    Gathered and sitting quietly
    Patiently waiting
    While awkwardly passing
    A rough golden crown amongst them









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