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    dots Submission Name: Defectdots
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    Author: LighterFluid
    ASL Info:    18/F/Pluto
    Elite Ratio:    2.99 - 11/9/5
    Words: 62
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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       decected is I


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    dotsDefectdots
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    I am defected
    Defected severely

    A hole in the boat
    A dent in the hood

    Who will sew the tear in my heart?
    Who will mend the hole in the boat?

    Can it be fixed?
    Never

    One thing time cannot erase

    I am breathing proof





    Submitted on 2008-11-18 05:36:37     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I love the simplicity, simple but powerful....not easy to do.
    Great job,

    WarmGun
    | Posted on 2011-08-19 00:00:00 | by WarmGun | [ Reply to This ]
      Great Job!
    i know what you mean.
    Buster
    | Posted on 2009-05-29 00:00:00 | by BusterLILblock | [ Reply to This ]
      kid this poem is awesome. i love how u ended it. with strong lines.



    and its better to know that u r a bit defected or else the pride issue comes in. so keep up the gud work.


    peace

    Hungry Warrior





    | Posted on 2009-01-15 00:00:00 | by DaGrimReaperess | [ Reply to This ]
      This is extremely sad. No one deserves to feel that they are an ail of society. The defected are those who take advantage of the less fortunate.

    - A.I.M
    | Posted on 2008-11-18 00:00:00 | by AIM | [ Reply to This ]


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