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    dots Submission Name: confessions - over carmine and chaidots
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    Author: Universal
    ASL Info:    17/f/Australia
    Elite Ratio:    3.21 - 46/48/35
    Words: 68
    Class/Type: Prose/Misc
    Total Views: 618
    Average Vote:    3.0000
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    dotsconfessions - over carmine and chaidots
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    I love you and I swear Iíll swear it again because thereís a sea of chaos inside of me, slowly pulled by planet bodies, the bodies i touch, the fingerprints Iíve never shown you, heat marks on windows.

    This is this ocean of ours rising and falling, hot then cold, bubbling to the surface a thousand tiny eggs the shape and size of questions




    Submitted on 2008-11-18 11:11:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      The turmoil of your passion makes me believe its real. Your imagery is great too. I especially like "eggs the shape and size of questions"
    | Posted on 2008-11-19 00:00:00 | by my shadow | [ Reply to This ]
      hi, great thoughts. poe
    | Posted on 2008-11-18 00:00:00 | by poetotoe | [ Reply to This ]


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