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    dots Submission Name: Ugly Girldots
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    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 184
    Class/Type: Poetry/Trapped
    Total Views: 376
    Average Vote:    4.0000
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    dotsUgly Girldots
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    Ugly Girl

    How much accrued opinion
    Of fashion magazines distinction
    Did it take

    How many diets
    And days of self-conscious

    How much make up
    Did they use
    To paint your warm smile
    And your sweet bright eyes

    How many narrow teases and sidelong glances
    And peer pressure enhancements
    To convince you

    Ugly girl

    How much money did you spend
    On the must have pages
    On the latest trend
    Of their uniformity
    Their mask that fits you so neatly
    With their plastic acceptability

    And how many round pegs
    In square holes
    To fit you into that dress

    Ugly girl

    How much more make up will it take
    Before you see

    You never needed it any way

    How much more acceptance and approval
    Will it take to convince you
    That you are just an ugly girl

    How many less kilograms
    How many less pounds
    How much blemish removal cream
    Or centimeters of clean clear skin

    To judge you to perfection

    Ugly girl











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    ||| Comments |||
      Hm... I like this one too. I appreciate the thought behind this although I do not accept it fully. My vision and approach on this subject matter is a bit different. Read my poem Atomic Angel if you want to find out. I really like this line: "Or centimeters of clean clear skin" It flows very nicely. You seem to be a good writer.
    | Posted on 2008-11-21 00:00:00 | by Paradox | [ Reply to This ]
      I like the statement that this makes. No matter what high fashion thinks, many of those who represent that beautiful have ugly souls.

    You have a good overall format here, although I'd join the "You never needed it any way" to the lines before it to keep your format a little more uniform throughout the whole piece.

    Jan
    | Posted on 2008-11-19 00:00:00 | by jaycee | [ Reply to This ]


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