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    dots Submission Name: Naked Flamencodots

    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 395
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    dotsNaked Flamencodots

    A Polite Warning. The Following poem is somewhat steamy. Not explicit, but explicit in inference. If this sort of thing offends you, then please be considerate and don’t read it. Thank you.

    Naked Flamenco

    ( A sultry summer night spent together
    With ardour between us growing
    She whispered, “Let me dance for you”
    I agreed, little knowing………………. )

    Binding spells of mysterious wanting
    Soft dark her eyes looked
    Into the shades of my mind
    An enchantress of fantasy
    She etched her velvet pattern
    On veiled secrets

    Dangerous lashes flutter desirous
    In emerald peacock pupils
    Midnight burnished hair let fall
    In captivating tangles
    To full ephemeral corners
    Of soft bitten lip
    Coy damp line drawn on her cheek

    Her expression acknowledges
    With known provoking smiles
    Eye lights shine saying “already mine”
    With twisting flamenco poised
    Sensual arm insinuates to finger tip
    And eventides rose is pale skinned
    And naked

    Curved line from ankle
    Writes portents to the nape of her neck
    Through black tousled sexual spinal blades
    Shoulder dipping
    Quivers her femininity to rising breasts
    While arched longing
    Mouths the indescribable tactile seconds
    Of her promontory dancing

    Patient in toe tip exquisite she places
    Penchant elegance
    Of her naked ballet
    The ribbon swirl of vanished gossamer dress
    Depicted wing-ed arms
    She rises a surrealistic
    Flight of angels created

    In soft light air brushed forms
    Of muscle, rib cage, bones and tendons
    Body writhed centres eclipse
    On pubic between
    The epitome of gestalts navel breathing

    I shudder Goosebumps of enthralling
    Built by such grace of a heavenly
    Consecrated female
    Led beyond mere heated needing
    To a place resplendent
    With sheer untameable and un-nameable beauty

    Guitar stringing twangs the milliseconds
    Of her overture
    Spanish castanets tap click fervent
    Pronouncing the rhythm of my heart
    Naked pale formed Goddess
    Gently rips from me
    Every appreciations confession of
    Perfections contours

    Fine satin sheen hairs risen
    Beading sweats slight trickle
    Aroused by my infatuation
    Nipples stiffen
    And I am drawn from and by
    Heavy breath to music’s ending
    To land in her presence

    She has seen through me
    Every century of a woman’s glory
    And with a slow beckoning finger
    Her eager eyes
    Tell me
    It is so

    Submitted on 2008-11-19 17:00:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like this. It has some flaws, some parts seem a bit forced. But I really like some of the disjointed words u use. It reminds me a lot of some of my own work. U got something going here. I'm off to read some of your other poems.
    | Posted on 2008-11-21 00:00:00 | by Paradox | [ Reply to This ]
      Okay, I have to stop reading your poems at school when I'm surrounded by my friends. Half of my friends are now hopelessly in love with you (2 of them being guys, I'd be afraid if I were you)

    Anyway, I'm sure you aren't interested the slightest by the trifle, flirtatious fantasies of my friends, so here's my opinion.

    I liked it, though I can't exactly relate to it... yet. But other than that, it was beautifully descriptive and deliciously emotional.
    | Posted on 2008-11-21 00:00:00 | by Iffy | [ Reply to This ]

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