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    dots Submission Name: Smile and kiss medots
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    Author: darkonesgirl
    ASL Info:    21/f/sc
    Elite Ratio:    3.32 - 233/245/125
    Words: 115
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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       this is to my angel im with now ohh how i do love him


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    dotsSmile and kiss medots
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    Thinking of this month thatís past,
    Oh how I wish it would last!
    Not wanting us to end,
    Instead wishing we could bend,
    All the hands of time,
    So we could be just fine!

    I love the way you smile,
    It makes me want to walk the extra mile!
    I love the way you kiss me,
    I feel like Iíve climbed a tree!
    I love the way you pull me close,
    I could never get enough of that dose!

    When the sun goes down,
    I know I will not frown,
    For our beds are one!
    My love to you I have sworn,
    And will never fade away,
    But it will only stay!




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      Wow now this is one of the best poems I have read on here and the tiltle fits purfectly with the lyrics to the poem. It kept me entertained as the words flowed together off the page and wanting more.
    Nicely writen My fav!


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    | Posted on 2009-06-03 00:00:00 | by totojane03 | [ Reply to This ]


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