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    Author: scardnscared
    ASL Info:    20
    Elite Ratio:    2.87 - 339/412/257
    Words: 126
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 105
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    Bytes: 763



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    I watched him walk down the path
    watched him walk out of my life.
    Couldn't believe that he'd be gone
    for seven months of my life.
    The car stops and he gets in
    his face is grim as he looks back
    he waves goodbye.
    I try to smile
    but I know it would only be invain
    so I wave, as the tears roll down my face.
    It hurts so much to see him go
    but I know I couldn't stop him.
    He says its his job
    saving some other man for his country.
    Its hard to understand
    but still I try.
    I don't complain
    cause all I feel is proud.
    I guess all these other marine's wife
    must feel the same.
    but who knows.





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