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    dots Submission Name: rocks and mountainsdots
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    Author: gjenkins
    Elite Ratio:    1.85 - 88/107/97
    Words: 252
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsrocks and mountainsdots
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    the third one is
    always the hardest to
    get through, like dragging
    a stubborn brat by the
    Sears' toy department,
    like an uninstinctive tree
    refusing to bud its leaves

    I sit behind the typer
    with the window at my back,
    telling myself
    "write, write,write"
    a cool dishonesty comes
    over me and settles
    about my frame,

    the phone rings but the
    rum has defeated all
    distractions,

    "get on with it," I tell
    myself, "get on with it
    before the worms
    have the last laugh,"

    my wife is in the kitchen
    cooking something,
    the room is quiet with
    the exception of clanking
    dishes

    she doesn't like my stuff
    lately, well join the masses,
    I don't like it either
    on occasions,
    but it's not up to me,
    or her,
    or you





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      i can relate.. that includes the rum.
    | Posted on 2009-03-24 00:00:00 | by blackbird | [ Reply to This ]


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