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    dots Submission Name: First Doubtdots

    Author: laffeytaffey
    ASL Info:    21/F/IL
    Elite Ratio:    1.77 - 21/15/7
    Words: 42
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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       I wrote this one the day after Halloween... My boyfriend and I had a date, but I guess you could say he "stood me up".

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    dotsFirst Doubtdots

    Dull emotions
    I don't want to smile
    Just leave me alone

    Was I better off alone?
    Without a kiss to remember
    To miss?

    Always I treat
    Only to be tricked
    I guess this Laffey
    Isn't happy

    Submitted on 2008-11-20 01:26:33     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This was a very cool piece, I found myself laughing.. Though I am sorry to here about your bf standin ya up.. but the write was really i dont know.. like a tragedy comedy, like Candide.

    Anyways I thought it was well layed out, your wording was very cool. very Stategic.
    | Posted on 2008-11-20 00:00:00 | by intodesi | [ Reply to This ]

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