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    dots Submission Name: More Than Just This Bodydots
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    Author: dancer06
    ASL Info:    20/f
    Elite Ratio:    4.75 - 234/171/46
    Words: 287
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    I know you would like to touch this body
    To feel what is underneath these clothes
    But what I need you to see,
    Is that Iím more then this body,
    I am more than whatís underneath these clothes.

    I am this heart that beats faster when youíre near.
    I am this mind, that canít stop thinking about you.
    I am this soul that sings a mournful song.
    I am a girl, no, a woman with a passion.
    I am a woman with a goal to achieve in life.

    I am not just these breasts that move with every breath.
    I am more than this stomach with these butterflies.
    I am more than these beautiful blue eyes,
    These eyes show pain, determination, and independence.
    These eyes show a small light into my feelings.

    I hold my head high because I bend for no man,
    But should you touch my cheek, it will fall into your touch.
    But should you touch my stomach,
    I will turn and walk away, because Iím more then this body.
    I am not a trophy of your conquer.

    This is me in the only way I know how to say,
    That I am scared to fall for you.
    Scared you like me for the wrong reasons,
    That you will use me and abuse me.
    This is me taking my time to feel you out.

    I am this insecure yet stubborn girl.
    But I am wise beyond my years in life and love.
    I know what I am, and I know what I am not.
    I need you to take a step back, and see me for me.
    From the distance, see I am more than just this body.




    Submitted on 2008-11-20 17:35:45     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Insecure? What is there to be insecure about? Finally someone who is thinking about their own needs. And your right, you should not bow to any one, and everyone has the right to be respected. Its sad that you have to feel bad for demanding such a basic thing.
    | Posted on 2008-11-21 00:00:00 | by Enslaved Shonen | [ Reply to This ]
      This was amazing!!! I absolutely love it. It was written fantastically and I can completely relate. I just went through this. Unfortunetly, I lost the guy as a friend. I'm very happy that you're standing up for you and not giving into the physical desires of some guy. You go girl!!!
    Keep up the fantastic work, and I'll keep reading.

    ĽHaelyę
    | Posted on 2008-11-20 00:00:00 | by MinervaBlu | [ Reply to This ]


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