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    dots Submission Name: Music That Lingersdots
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    Author: Iffy
    Elite Ratio:    6.33 - 91/55/41
    Words: 213
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsMusic That Lingersdots
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    You played your song just once, at noon
    Your piece was about four minutes long
    Silence overflowed in the crowded room
    The audience lapped up every note in your song

    You piece was about four minutes long
    Each minute brought with it a vivid new tale
    The audience lapped up every note in your song
    I lapped up every small detail

    Each minute brought with it a vivid new tale
    The flawless tune took me to a far away place
    I lapped up every small detail
    The shimmer in you eye, the glow in your face

    The flawless tune took me to a far away place
    There was only you and me for a while
    The shimmer in your eye, the glow in you face
    You were so breathtaking that I had to smile

    There was only you and me for a while
    Nothing came between us while you played
    You were so breathtaking that I had to smile
    The music beneath your fingers left my mind and soul dazed

    Nothing came between us while you played
    When you finished, they were cheering as far as the eye could see
    The music beneath your fingers left my mind and soul dazed
    Your song forever lingers in my memory




    Submitted on 2008-11-21 00:26:53     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I really enjoyed this piece, though as a musician I can admit I'm a little biased haha. But seriously I like how it was pieced together and how you used the second line in each stanza to start the next. I hope that's how people feel when I play! good write :)
    | Posted on 2009-03-05 00:00:00 | by all2rest | [ Reply to This ]
      Ah i really liked this poem! It was very nicely done! Music in poetry flows so well lol
    | Posted on 2008-11-25 00:00:00 | by Anneboleyn707 | [ Reply to This ]



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