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    dots Submission Name: One Meets Anotherdots
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    Author: KeeperOfLight
    ASL Info:    23, Vancouver BC
    Elite Ratio:    2.54 - 40/64/74
    Words: 136
    Class/Type: Story/Misc
    Total Views: 592
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    Description:
       Start of the third chapter of Dragon Effect.... first chap : in the darkness second chap: Racing Time....

    critique till death takes its place


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    dotsOne Meets Anotherdots
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    I return to my present state, letting my mind flow away from those minute creatures around myself. I am resting here, looking over the water that falls from the high cliffs, into the ancient abyss that has been piercing into the earth for thousands of years. The sound is shattering like the voice of the sky. At the end of the raging cliffs, where the still water sings to the paddles of birds, the pedagogy quarter is seemingly peaceful.

    Though only those who can see through this mask of calamity have reason to fear. For there are more than liquid and feathered creatures roaming this cliff side mountain. Xinyon, my kind also partakes in this territory... to hunt and feed on the rugged Creatures of Sky Water Season...




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